Big thank you to Jen for organising the blogfest! It was a ton of fun and I'm really enjoying getting to meet new bloggers and reading everyone's work!
Here's my snippet from yesterday:
Today I'm participating in my first blogfest, organised by the lovely Jen of Unedited. I know blogfest posts can be lengthy and time-consuming to comment on, so if you're not participating please don't feel obliged!
The Guess that Character blogfest is this: I post a snippet of my writing, and you try to guess what the main character looks like.
Here's a bit from the opening of a short story I've written called The Five-Year Itch.
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Jem Ryan turned her smile on the eager crowd in front of her.
‘And that, ladies and gentleman,’ – she sighed as she spotted the man at the back of the room; there always had to be one who turned up, thinking the women were easy pickings – ‘is how I’ve gone five years without sex.’
The women clapped and looked up at her as if she’d just given them the recipe to calorie-free chocolate.
Jem held up her hands. ‘It’s my five-year anniversary today, actually!’
The applause swelled and Jem nodded graciously, smoothing down her pencil skirt and straightening the cuffs on her fitted shirt. She always made an effort to show that even though she didn’t desire, she could still be desirable. The funny thing was, ever since she’d vowed not to have sex, she’d practically had to beat off fanciable men with a stick.
‘There are CDs and T-shirts at the back, and I’ll be signing books in the foyer for the next hour,’ Jem said when the clapping finally stopped. ‘Pre-dinner drinks start at seven in the hotel bar. And remember: sex-free is sexy!’
She came down off the podium and into the swarming crowd, smiling and shaking the hands of women who gushed how she had helped them find a new direction, a new confidence... ugh. She wrinkled her nose. Some of them needed to find a new deodorant.
Jem settled behind the table in the foyer and picked up her pen.
‘Oh!’ The man she’d seen at the back of the room was smiling down at her. Close up he was even better looking, with thick blonde hair that waved over his forehead and just the right amount of stubble poking through his chin. What the hell was he doing here? If he thought any of her women would succumb to his looks, he had another think coming.
‘Can you sign my book?’ He put a copy of Living Sex Free and Loving It onto the table. Jem stared at his hands, with their long, solid fingers. Just the right amount of knuckle hair, no wedding ring... an image of his hands on her skin flashed through her mind, and the hair on the back of her neck stood up. In horror, of course.
‘Are you alright?’ the man was asking.
Jem cleared her throat and looked up again. ‘Who should I make it out it to?’
'Trevor.’
Jem relaxed her grip on the pen and let out her breath. Trevor. Any man called Trevor was sure to be the type who stopped in the middle of sex to have a dump, or something equally hideous. She scrawled her name across the book, omitting the kisses she usually put.
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So... what does Jem look like?
(And apologies to any man called Trevor; I just needed a name and that was it!)
Loved that opening line!
ReplyDeleteI would guess she is a woman of medium height, slim figure, small but attractive eyes, and high cheekbones.
I'm totally undecided over her hair....it could be pixie-short or curly, red tresses. But I guess I'll come find out for myself tomorrow!
I think she is stunning, even from a distance, and has had too many men chasing and using her, so that's why she gone off sex.
ReplyDeleteEither that or she's very very hairy all over her body and that's why she doesn't want a man to see her naked.
I'm with Damyanti on this! And she somehow strikes me as blond, nbo idea why.
ReplyDeleteAnd oh crap I thought we were supposed to use characters from other writers! Damn! Oh well! =)
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ReplyDeleteHee hee, I'm damn well hooked on blogfests!
Oh God, I loved this, but the last para put the tin hat on it: LOL.
Now, the guessing game: your feisty heroine is quite tall, slim, brunette (long flowing hair), dark brown come-to-bed-eyes, kissably pretty mouth, totally pee'd off with men salivating over her, and has just met the man who will tempt her beyond words, but he's gay! :)
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My guess is that her hair is dark blonde, clearly dyed but in a nice, subtle way, with hints of brown showing through from the lower layers. And it's shoulder-length and mostly straight, but it's clear that she straightens it to remove the natural wave.
ReplyDeleteI see her with blue eyes, a small but very straight nose, lips about medium fullness, very nicely applied makeup. She looks like the only really attractive teacher you ever had. . .
Love this, Talli - what a great snippet!
ReplyDeleteHmm...I think she's tall and thin. She's got long auburn hair, green eyes, and a light complexion. With long, manicured fingernails, of course!
I think she has dark hair which is poker straight and cut into a razor sharp medium lenght bob. She has green/grey eyes, high cheekbones and a full mouth.
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Thanks for the guesses! Some of you are really close!
ReplyDeleteWhy am I thinking icy teutonic amazonian blonde?????? Why?!?!?!
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I know this isn't the point of the blogfest, but this scene is fantastically well written! The characterization was subtle but beautifully done. So, onto the actual point...
ReplyDeleteAll right, so I'm seeing two possibilities in my mind: A) Shiny blonde hair pulled back, breathtaking smile, brown eyes, average height. B) Artfully tumbled red curls (darkish red), green eyes, small nose, and a bit shorter than average, but not much.
I may be totally off, but those are two people I see. :)
I have to say that I will disregard the last part of this snippet since my husband's name is Trevor and he would so not do that, lol.
ReplyDeleteGreat piece! I love your writing and feel lucky to have gotten to read something!
Jem sounds super cute... so here is my guess:
She is tall, thin, blond hair which lately has been pulled back tightly in a bun, having control is what gives her the strength to stay away from that nasty thing they call sex (LOL). Blue eyes, excellent bone structure and the thing like most about her are her legs. (Of course her personality as well, duh!)
Can't wait to see how far off I am! Thank you so much for participating!!!
Great extract Talli...the less said about Trevor the better..
ReplyDeletebut great character descriptions.
I'm thinking Keira Knightley, dark haired and brown eyed, with that clipped, haughty look going on.
This reminds me of book club where we had to assign actors to characters in books and we gave up when everyone said 'Denzel Washington' for every character.
What a beautiful scene. I could drown in it- it is that lovely.
ReplyDeleteHow do I see her? Shiny black hair cut into a neat cut which I can NEVER maintain. Slim, average height, attractive. Long fingers, green eyes.
I see her as skinny.
ReplyDeleteYeah, the male powers of observation are severely lacking!
This is fantasatic!
ReplyDeleteI would say tall, blonde with blue eyes. A bombshell.
Great job!
What a beautifully written excerpt and great concept!
ReplyDeleteMy guess? Tall, well-toned from regular gym workouts, sandy hair, hazel-green eyes that look confidently into other people's eyes.
wow, thats got me wanting to read more!!!
ReplyDeleteIn my mind I see her as tall but not skinny, more on the curvy side with very very short hair, dark brown/red colour with large round green eyes, long lashes and high cheekbones with a stunning easy smile.
Probably nothing like her?!
She'd have to be attractive. I would go with long, light hair - blond, but with some brown. I would say she'd have blue or green eyes and be thin. Is this what you're going for?
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Funny! lol. I'd think she'd look really well put together. Shoulder length smooth brown hair, creamy complexion and big green or blue eyes.
ReplyDeleteThe title didn't hook me, until I learned what the itch was! (Does that make me dirty-minded? Hee hee)
ReplyDeleteShe's slim, with a narrow face and a pixie cut of dark brown hair. She has green eyes and a set of chic, black-rimmed glasses. Always neat and tidy, sexy, and knows it.
stopped in the middle of sex to have a dump! Hysterical! oh oh oh...I want to read more!
ReplyDeleteBut ahem...Jem...
Quietly gorgeous, of course. Classy, understated elegance. Always fashionable and attractive, but not ruled by fashion. I've been seeing a lot of blondes this morning so I wanna say a brunette just to be different, but I really am seeing a blonde with longer hair. Maybe a little on the strawberry blonde side. Tall, slender, confident (obviously)...and about to lose total control with the Trev-meister.
I'm going with drop-dead gorgeous. Like Scarlett Johanssen. A certified blonde bombshell. She oozes sex, which is why she's not having it. She wants something deeper, more meaningful, something not based on her looks.
ReplyDeleteIn horror of course - Great line!! :)
ReplyDeleteLet's see... hmmm... tall, slim but with curves, short sleek dark hair.
Call me nuts...but I see Sarah Jessica Parker as your MC. I see that kind of resolve in her personality. :)
ReplyDeleteI'm visualizing a tall, trim woman, long, thick blonde hair, large blue eyes. She'll be professionally dressed, but sexy professional. Suit with a short skirt, in a stong but powerful feminine color--red maybe, or purple, with high heels that show off her legs. A look that says: I'm sexy, even if I'm not having sex.
ReplyDeleteLol. So loved this :)
ReplyDeleteI'm picturing medium height, slim with medium length brown hair, maybe some highlights.
hahahaha! What an great snippit! This woman must look like the stereo-typical career woman who has it all, even though she doesn't really feel like she fits the part. She dresses up to please others, and never for herself. Very classy, but wishes she could just eat with her hands instead of fiddling with a knife and fork :o)
ReplyDeleteGuess my character correctly and win a prize!
very funny! The hair rose on the back of her neck - in horror of course - i loved this! Well what does she look like? A young Germaine Greer - but groomed like a sex in the city way(I know thats an obvious response!)
ReplyDeleteAnother face that came to mind was the actress with the red hair...whats her name? oh god...she did the end of the affair, the hours, not kidman... this is killing me!
LOL! This is great Talli. I see a slim, trim, professional woman who tends to wear dark solid colored clothes with a bright colored scarf and matching accessories. She is not tall, no more than 5'5", short either very dark brown or black hair, lavender eyes, fair skin. Very attractive in a young Elizabeth Taylor sort of way.
ReplyDeleteAwesome!! Um... I think I know where this is headed ;--)
ReplyDeleteOkay, I picture wavy blond hair to her shoulders and blue eyes, full lips and nice figure.
A short brunette whose buttons on her starched white blouse keep popping because she can't contain her heaving bosoms.
ReplyDeleteBlondish hair cut in an angle bob, high heels, professional, well dressed. Bites her lip a lot.
ReplyDeleteTalli,
ReplyDeleteSince men are attractive to her like flies it seems, I pinned her a fashionista, tall, blonde, huge brown eyes.
p.s. this scene is great. Really good writing there.
so funny! (i kinda feel the same way about the name trevor...)
ReplyDeletei pictured Siwan Morris. anywhere close???
I picture Jan from The Office, but less bitchy, or Tina Fey, but less funny. Definitely dressed very neat and formal, long straight brunette hair. Pretty face and smile but very reserved.
ReplyDeleteLove it! Especially the line that Trevor looks like he could be a man that stops to have dump in the middle of sex. LOL!
ReplyDeleteI think she has a long nose and Angeline Jolie lips.
Long brown hair pulled back into a bun showing off her heart shaped face and soft amber eyes. Thin, tall with just the right amount of assets.
ReplyDeleteShe sounds like someone who has attracted the wrong man one too many times and gave up any hope of finding someone worthwhile. (Hugs)Indigo
She is tall slender, but has defined muscles. Short perfectly cut brown hair, she has to keep up appearances for her shows so she has manicured hands and feet too! High heels always. Shes confident and a little snobby but likable and genuine most of the time. I'd say hazel eyes
ReplyDeleteI'm seeing a petite, curvy gal with long, dark hair. Cat-like eyes with long lashes and a heart-shaped mouth. Stunning, but maybe in a semi-typical way. Maybe she fits the bill of "sex-kitten" too well, and that was part of her resolution to give it up; men were interested without knowing a thing about her.
ReplyDeleteGreat voice, Talli!
Tall, long-legged, long shimmering black hair. Blue eyes. Lips a little thin.
ReplyDeleteWho'd have thought to cash in on not having sex? Hmmm. Fun bit!
this blogfest is interesting!
ReplyDeleteI stopped by to tell you about an award for you from my book blog!
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Great snippet, loved it. Want to read more! I'm guessing Jem is tall with sharp curves, long and shiny black hair and bright blue eyes with long eye lashes. And I reckon she'll be wearing high heels. (Oddly enough I had an ex boyf called Jem, short for Jeremy, and I've just described a female version of him, bar the high heels!) Ooh, this is fun :0)
ReplyDeleteI love your voice so much! I can't wait for your book to come out. :)
ReplyDeleteI pictured Jem as tall, nicely built, great legs--a very expensive, shortish haircut. Blonde, possibly. Brown eyes.
Oh my goodness--that was awesome Talli! Really. The Trevor line had me totally cracking up.
ReplyDeleteAnd my brain went immediately to a blonde bombshell. That's probably too predictable though, so I'm betting I'm wrong...
Thanks for all the comments! It's so fun to see what people think Jem looks like!
ReplyDeleteI'm sorry I haven't got around to all the entries yet; today's been mental. But tomorrow I hope to get around to more!
That was great! I want to read more!
ReplyDeleteLet's see, Jem is an attractive woman with wavy blonde hair, a toned, not thin, build. She has brown eyes and fair skin, complimented by a beautiful bone structure.
Okay, if you happen to remember Andi McDowell, that's who I pictured. Long curly black hair, pale skin, dramatic eyes and striking profile.
ReplyDeleteShe's tall 5'10" and slim. Blonde hair with honey highlights, blue eyes, and full lips, that create the perfect pout. She stands up straight even when she towers over people with the heels wears. She enjoys crushing men's spirits.
ReplyDeleteI'm loving this blogfest, such great snippets and I've got a long list of books I'm dying to read, now, LOL.
Oh my - I'm still getting over Trevor taking a dump line..hehe. Truly icky man.
ReplyDeleteI see Gem as an immaculate blonde, not a hair out of place, wears tailored clothes and big heels! Big beautiful brown eyes and a pouty smile that makes men cry!!
ROFL!!! Talli you crack me up! Thank you for adding the text at the end, I'm glad that you are still a fan of the name Trevor.
ReplyDeleteSame applies for me though... I should be apologizing for anyone by the name of Stacy or Veronica, LOL... I think their names just sound mean :)
love it. I'm imagining she is early thirties shoulder length brown hair with a sophisticated cut. She's either in a pants suit or business skirt - feminine, but professional. Possibly she's wearing glasses. She's tan and trim. I see her with a medium build.
ReplyDeleteI see her almost like a Katie Holmes but with a short, pixie style hair cut. Great excerpt!
ReplyDeleteI'd say she's 5'7" wears heels so she looks taller. Her hair is hair-salon blond and cut short, her eyes are icy blue, and her tight professional clothes reveal a curvaceous body under them. She's not afraid to show she's sexy even though she shuns sex (can't figure out why--I'm sure there's a good reason) and she has suppressed desires by evidence of her slip when she meets Trevor.
ReplyDeleteCan't wait to meet her tomorrow! :D
LOL!! Her opinion about taking a dump in the middle of sex made me laugh!
ReplyDeleteI imagine her as beautiful as Charlise. She has short, blonde hair, a pixie face with big blue eyes. She's very slender but by no means lacking in curves.
Fun read!!! I love the plot!
Talli,
ReplyDeleteI must say I love your style of writing--that line about finding a new deodorant made me burst out laughing!
I think of her as petite & slender [she wouldn't be wearing a skirt like that if she wasn't] & fine featured. She probably has medium brown curly hair. I think her shoes have heels no higher than 2" because she wants to be comfortable but not look dowdy.
Oh, this was a great entry!
ReplyDeleteI'm guessing medium height with cropped brown hair and bright blue eyes.
Can't wait for the reveal!
Aha! I knew it.
ReplyDeleteShe is so close to how I saw her, and now I know what her hair looks like!
ReplyDeleteGreat photo - I really enjoyed your entry!
ReplyDeleteGreat photo! This was such a good entry!
ReplyDeleteThanks so much for dropping by, everyone! It's been so lovely to meet new bloggers and read all the entries. I'm still trying to get around to everyone!
ReplyDeleteGod, I should have stuck with my instincts and said brunette. I did get the pulled-together control freak vibe. I'm gonna count this as a near victory because my score card is in desperate need of some hits to counteract all my misses!
ReplyDeleteThis photo works for her! I don't think I got the hair right, but the confidence I think is there in that picture. great pick for her. Thanks for posting
ReplyDeleteshe's way more glossy and conservative than i imagined! another one bites the dust!
ReplyDeleteYes this is how I pictured her. I even imagined her in red. Great character.
ReplyDeleteLove it, Talli! That's slightly more conservative than what I pictured, but still close. Well done!
ReplyDeleteUmmm, I was off! lol. Great pic! ;)
ReplyDeleteMissed that one by....oh.....a football field! :) Dang it!!
ReplyDeleteTalli! I LOVED this snippet! I'm so sorry I didn't make it over here yesterday for Part One of the blogfest. I couldn't access the Mr. Linky thing-a-ma-boop and had to follow links from other participant's comment section. What a pain. The reveal pic is stunning and perfect for your character. Especially the red suit -- there's something about that detail that works perfectly for the scene you posted!
ReplyDeleteHope you have a wonderful weekend!
She looks brilliant and confident. Great pick! Sorry I didn't make it in time to guess yesterday.
ReplyDeleteWell, I was halfway there. :]
ReplyDeleteNice photo!
Well I was way off. lol. But I loved your snippet ;)
ReplyDeleteAwesome story Talli and i thought she was blonde too, don't know why but thanks for letting us in on it. Sorry i have been offline that's why am late dear xo
ReplyDeleteAh she is absolutely perfect for Gem. Lovely! This has been an amazing blogfest! Have a fab w/end x
ReplyDeleteWhat does Jem look like? Good grief, how can I concentrate on looks with a snip like that? I want more of the story!!!
ReplyDeleteOkay, seriously... hmm, she's not blonde, she might have green eyes, she's got pale skin.
Oh, hey, look, you've already posted the image! I was right about her hair!
So, where's the next scene?